Monday, August 2, 2010

adam

he stands at ease his hands on his hips
looking over his kingdom below
his understanding shows in his eyes

as the light dances from his smile
the curls of his hair move in the air
bringing attention to his beauty

is it possible that i could approach
this man that inspires
these feelings that burn me inside

my first real try at righting a poem. good, bad, needs some work?

2 comments:

  1. I have a lot of experience with poetry writing,
    and I reckon its the makings of a really good poem :)
    Keep at it! x

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  2. thank you. i certainly wish i had your talent for prose. i just love it all.

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